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Book of Dreams

Post by Nepenthe on Mon Aug 31, 2009 5:59 pm

Fate

Like the moon her eyes
Stars shimmered in her hair
“Let us meet then in December.”

December came
She was not there
A single flake down the sky

January came and went
In February she wrote
“In Egypt I am.”

In March she came
With hair as wheat in summer
“I will stay with you.”

We were seventeen that year
Young and fair
“We will stay for forever”

Soon church bells chimed
For us and only for us
“Yes, I will”, she said

Few months passed in happiness
As fate struck in
“Death stands at our door.”

Withering and wilting
Her beauty faded
“Remember our promise.”

A grave covered with roses
And lilies she liked
“My dearest girl, I love you so.”

Darkness entered my world
The stars vanished in the night
“One day together again.”



Written for a RP with a friend of mine. It was a pretty dark one.
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Post by Nepenthe on Mon Aug 31, 2009 6:03 pm

Trail of Ashes


Clad in darkness he is coming
A trail of ashes in his wake
The darkest night his haven safe
Destruction of the world his war

Dreams and wishes left behind
A band of heroes went for blood
To fight with arrow, bow and sword
Against the evil in their midst

With magic strong and steel so sharp
A demon on their world unleashed
The crowded city left in ruins
And death amidst the mighty ones

Inferno, necromancing debt
Brought sin into the hero's band
And then their hearts so weak
Surrendered well to darkness sweet

With darkness in his evil heart
He conquered soon the foreign world
The peasants, knights and kings so fair
Never found a way to darkness fight

Clad in darkness he is coming
A trail of ashes in his wake
And death upon the cursed world
Clad in darkness and in death



My try on telling a story not in prose but lyrical.
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Post by savfantasy on Thu Sep 10, 2009 12:13 pm

I like the second one best; it sent shivers up my spine. The only thing I don't like about the first one is the Yoda-like dialoge when she's telling him she's in Egypt. Moving around words in a sentence may be necissary sometimes to make something fit or rhyme, but I don't believe it is here. But that might be my problem and not yours. ^^;
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